Critiques from district contest.

District Contest- my notes and judges’ notes

Everyone	Consonants, especially during first scenes and song. Ending – longer and hushed.
Mrs. Briggs	At the end of your lines, make sure they don’t die.
Joan	Tick tick – swing the clock.  Turn, we want the audience see the love on your face toward Brian that betrays your words. Change no you won’t – be more honest on the last one. Highs and lows in speech.  Walk to Evan
Joan, Judith, Mrs. Briggs	Look at the men until they are off stage. More of a moment – use hankies
Tom	More childlike noises with planes and shooting
Dead girl Tom, Mira	Kate cover yourself with bricks so that Mira and Tom have to move bricks to get you out.
Foreman Mr. Briggs	I have your eye patch
Viv and Soldier 1 Haris	Viv, we need to see  you make a decision to “go to the back.”   Haris, react bigger to Viv giving in – not so much that you are about to score, but you are surprised.
Judith	Louder on shirt dialogue IF HIS HELMET is out there, use it during ending or yours and Joan’s scene.
Frank	See tattered flag  when you die
Carly	Light on Judith reading death letter.
Parachuter	Arch back when shot.
Joan and Brian	Work on levels in your relationship at the beginning.
Jill Ludington	Live people in dead scene Ludington suggested waiting to look for items until after Frank’s monologue.  There is a spit focus. Another split focus is when Tom is hurt.  Stop and freeze ? Scenes rushed – Frank and Judith More levels and touching in Joan and Judith’s scene. Quiet, speed, slow, loud – more variety
Peggy Lovett	More pain in Joan as Brian goes to war – dialogue with him. Bring dead girl out more so we can see her before she speaks. LOVED DEAD PEOPLE Only thing missing is smoke – but she doesn’t think we need it (but she mentioned it)
Shari Belizzi-Davis	First time I ever cried judging a one act. Characters need to face each other when addressing each other (?) – must be dead Frank and living Judith. When screaming, lower vocal register Watch profiling Careful with music being too loud under dialogue. Stage business for Judith and Frank – she says they need an obstacle between them (might be interesting) Watch spontaneity. Keep it going – doing it for the first time.
Next week	Gary Davis – 1. Diction and projection   2. Bigger than life characters  3. Character arcs.  4. Create the world of the play Sherran Geistmann – Loves singing and stage pictures. Big on vocal variety,  (THIS IS CRAZY – but walk quieter on unit sets.  Don’t shift from foot to foot. LOVES SLOW MOTION. Terry Marrs -