January 18 Critiques

January 18, 2018

Everyone	REACT BIGGER LOUDER BE in the moment For dead body scene, make sure the factory table is out of the way. We need to work on slow motion. Work on ending Work on hitting as a shot together Don’t touch the curtains. Don’t let the big table sit upside down. Hit verbs First song then machine After first bombing be devastated.  Take care of your family and friends. In scene changes more emotion, sounds, push each other, trip, fall, knock  over stuff. Use the top level of the set. Reactions should be different War announcement by Chamberlain should be momentous Listen to the letter Judith reads – REACT Fl flag  farewells – more levels –vocally and physically.  We need to hearyour transition INTO the scene and after the scene. This scene must be BIG ·     Screams all sound the same, then someone faked screamed at the end
Frank	Remember not to talk out so much at the beach. Costume at the end of the play? At the beach, your hat is too far down on your face. Be more confident in your first scenes with Judith. We need to see  you “dream” what you are saying. Tie this into the letter. Eli enunciate more and slow down in opening scene
Dead scene	People must see in their heads what happened – the pain of death. One line must flow into another’s line. Living people MUST REACT.
The Gently family	More laughs, more moments more touching Rock family was believable During Churchill speech, Kadyn, Cooper, Collin and Eli need to find levels
Angie	First line louder Tiptoe on set. Great reaction to parents singing
Judith and Joan	See the ebb and flow of your relationship.  TOUCH MORE. How does Joan feel when Judith is revealed as a traitor?  Joan is very patriotic. In first factory scene, see Joan try to keep Judith quiet physically. More interaction.
Pub women	Drink beer More vocals at the bar! Don’t wait on each other.
Sheila	Give em  hell! Give em a blighty one! Hit verbs in monologue
Tom and Angie	Could you burst out laughing when parents dance?
Frakker	Or I take none of you louder Suspenders Angle out. Enter USL
Briggs family	ALister is worried because he is no longer perfect in his mother’s eyes. Dad wants to help Alister and his wife. Mrs. Briggs must be more different in second scene. ·      Spencer do not speak with your back to the audience
Tom and Mira	Exit in new scene – USR Vocals as you are entering and exiting.  More horror with finding the body. Freeze stronger into an action.  The second chasing off wasn’t believable. The second scene must be believable.
Women	Hum louder when Joan kills German Actively watch – commit to reacting and watching. React to Frakker when he comes in.  Step on lines in factory scene.  In second scene, Judith’s sabotage must take everyone by surprise. Actively watch Tom and Mira’s scene. More vocals in last scene – from Judith to Joan’s face & letter – the stage should not be quiet. People need to react bigger or freeze. Can’t tell what they’re supposed to be doing
Judith, Joan,, Frank	Learn lines
Judith and Frank	Freeze during Joan and Brian scene. Vocals all one level in beach scene. In each scene, we need vocals and know you are in love. Frank reaches out to Judith as he leaves and Judith reaches out to Frank – Frank is in the red and Judith’s hand in the white light.
Brian	Different hat as Spender – paperboy and a hat as Aussie 1
Factory scene	Sing Britania as you are going to the pub and Angie and Judith going home.
Music	Too loud with first ironing scene – Eli said it was the wrong music? Firing is too loud. Can’t hear Eli’s lines over sound effects
Couples	Work on intimacy
Judith	Be ready with letters Coat on reading letter Be surprised by Frank’s dream of coming home
Soldier 2	Take jacket off in Australian scene. Hat covers your face
Angie and Aussie 2	Is Angie an innocent.  See the push and pull of emotions – wanting to but fearful. When does Angie make a decision?
Smuts	You could be next – deeper voice
Tom	Skipping rocks – laugh sounds fake. Hold up the doll. How would you feel if your dad really died.
Briggs and Foreman	Work on accents and be louder. Foreman, take control of your lines.  Be tough.
Photographer	Louder –  I’m supposed to….. Take charge of the scene.  Be in charge. Take pics of everyone.  Come in and spray paint your cameras Kaytlyn I cannot understand you as the photographer
Soldier 1	Don’t cover Viv when dancing.
Joan and Sheila	When dead people are talking you are doing the same thing.
Joan & Brian	Joan needs to be older. She needs to remember her husband see him in her mind’s eyes.  She knows he was a liar – went out with women.  We need to see the pain in your body and face. Brian protest sooner, mumble under your breath and react as Joan cuts down your father. Need to see Brian’s decision to leave and Joan’s to say she will not say good bye. Joan grabs Brian’s shoulder and he shrugs her off.
Judith and Angie	Angie is tickled.  We need more of a sense of family.
Viv and Aussie 1	Show more emotion.
Time	5- Nothing too passionate 10 – Did he look back 15 – Your country thanks you 20 – He was the first person to ever call me… 25- Burnt whole 30 – He could lift you with one hand 35 – now simple and uneventful it was 36:07
	·      ·      ·      ·      ·      ·      Kadyn and Eli you must make us believe your love. You still look like to strong actors on a stage ·      Ashlynn when you say “I’ll forget about you” line it is a threat. You are mad at him for leaving. Your next line after Kadyn and Eli can be a little sad, but still with anger ·      Eli when you talk about seeing the future, you need to seem sure of your future. ·      Cooper and Colin enunciate when you are moving around so much. It is hard to understand you ·      Johnny and Ramzy you were too early to the factory scene. Give them time to set up the tables before we see you ·      Eli you are gesturing with the wrong hand as Frakker ·      Do we have a wig for Eli as Frakker? He still looks too much like Frank ·      Sheila should try to flirt with Johnny in the factory ·      Reagan slow down in the bar scene ·      Reese you dropped your aussie accent when you stood up from the steps ·      Kadyn try to grab the doll when you ask to wash it ·      I still can’t tell the difference between living and dead in monologues scene ·      What if our living people were picking up and stacking the blocks while the monologues are given? ·      Good job memorizing your lines Colin ·      What if Maky threw the bat down as she walks off ·      Ladies slow down in the factory scene!!! ·      Kadyn start out less angry with “hate my country” and build to “win a little one for myself” ·      I think we need more time for Evan to land, wander in, be found by Judith, almost get stabbed, then Ashlynn