January 21 Critiques

Everyone	Over exaggerated scared faces. Cannot hear tipperary in back Be more scared.  This is the first bomb ever. Stay in character at all times.  Someone said – sorry when they messed up – don’t do that. STEP LIGHTER ON GRAY SET – SOUNDS HORRIBLE Quiet backstage LEARN LINES No one looked up during first bombing.  Someone could stand in shock because there were over a hundred spitfires that dropped 3,500 tons of explosives in the first day. In slow mo, your steps have to be in sync with your arms – both exaggerated and slow.
Women	React to Churchill on the radio!!!!!!! Talk when setting up the factory scene
Living people	The alarm just sounded – you could be looking for bodies.  Move slowly.  As things are found, look at them and wonder to whom they belonged.
Frank, foreman, and crippled man	Enter factory scene in a diagonal from USL.
Frank Frakker	Setting good people’s nerves on edge same pace and vocal level as previous line. Work on changing faster.  Don’t worry about buttoning the shirt. Get the jacket buttoned and let Judith help you. Cheat out more – we only see profile.
Alister Smuts	Not embarrassed enough. Louder Not enough authority
Photographer Bela	What yer names where you off to?  A little awkward – voice same as Bela’s Taking pics – be louder Accent was lost – do you mind Flowers and cake – louder Move stools so we can see Soldier 2 and Angie As bela stand like a lady
Angie	Look what I found – remember you just took that from a dead body.
Spencer & Maky	You didn’t have a weird face in Tipperary
Briggs	Shoes need to be black
Dead Girl	You may have to crawl past stuff so we can see you as if you are trying to get out.  Move, you are blocked in dead people scene.
Judith	More emotion reading the letter. Sometimes when people died, they included the last letter that was written by the dead person.  Let’s see you have two letters.
Alee	Help Cooper change faster.
SOUND	Fade when characters are talking
Australian 1	Jacket – ask Alee and FREEZE When dancing don’t be afraid to move your feet.
Angie	It’s all crooked at the top – you are talking about the lines on your leg, not your dress. Make that clear.
Mr. Briggs Foreman bartender	Have your head up when you freeze.