January 25
Critiques
Everyone
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Work on accents
Needs to flow
Better transitions
More breathing
People noises
More facial expressions and emotions
Freeze
Make sure all furniture is out of the
way of following scenes.
In Tipparery, all crates must be
returned to corners.
In bombings, we are going to change
some of the blocking.
More energy when parachute lands
Slo mo more exaggerated
Make sure we see sad soldier’s face in
the light. Mark it.
Hats are blocking actors’ faces.
Step on lines in factory scene.
When dancing don’t stop with back to
audience.
Work on accents.
War machine during tipperary scene –
sweep about every third Mississippi
Costumes must be zipped
Get the right bomb
Movements in slow mo need to be at same
speed.
We need to clean up confetti after each
rehearsal
Too many profiles
Put the stools down
Quiet on gray set
Women’s shoes
Need to hear you before we see you in
all entrances.
Hit verbs – work on this on Monday in
class.
Accents were lost
Tipperary – we need more people left
stage
NO SORRYS when messing up.
At the end, Kaytlyn and Maky switch
places
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SMUTS
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Remember it is
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Factory scene
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Excited about this being your first
job.
Listen to each other
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Dead scene
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Girl and student trade places
Step on lines – more emotion and
expression.
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Riley
Taylor
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Double check all clamps
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Judith
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Smile with shirt
In front of crates instead of behind
Cry sing at the end
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Photographer
Bela
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Don’t sway
Praying and Crying look fake – I’ll
look at it today
Enter sooner
More annoying when taking pics
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Soldier 1
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Don’t talk so fast
Down under – louder and slower
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Tom, Sheila, 7 whoever helps
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Table falling on Sheila – needs to
work.
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Freezes
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In the back and forth scene of pub and
Judith’s house, people who are not in the current scene, FREEZE
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Tom
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Don’t let your voice drop
Smell body before seeing it
Work on timing – doll scene – watch dead
girl
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Angie
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More embarrassed by your parents at the
beach
Smell the body as well
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Joan & Brian
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Step on lines and step on lines in
previous scene
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Payton and Maky
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React more in factory scenes.
I don’t think you would dump parts on
table in real factory – just put box down.
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Alister
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Louder
Diction in first scene.
More embarrassed with mom
Because you are shy doesn’t mean that
we shouldn’t hear you. LOUDER
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Dead girl
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Work on coming out, accent and not so
much as in the way of pauses.
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Joan
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More facial expressions when you get
the letter.
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soldiers
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Look up how you are supposed to wear
the uniform. Ask Alee. HATS look
crazy.
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Tom and Angie
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React when Eli screams
Need to hear you before we see you in
all entrances.
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Dead girl
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ACCENT
Need to see you in dead scene
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women
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Emotions setting up factory scene
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Foreman
& Briggs
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Don’t keep arms crossed all the time
Clench fists, clench fists with arms
crossed
Point with a finger
Flirt with Sheila
LOUDER
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Sheila and Foreman
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We need some sexual tension between you
both.
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Sheila
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All your one liners must be big and
like you DON”T care. Example sex laugh
will
Well bigger
Monologue more conversational
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Angie & soldier
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Don’t freeze with back to us dancing
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Lionel and soldiers
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Show emotion on your face.
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German and Australian
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Practice jumping with parachute
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Joan
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More emotion – I KILLED a man
She’ll come around – work on this. Hold
on to Judith.
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Frank and Judith
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Face both sides of the auditorium
Step on lines in previous scene.
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Viv and soldier
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Be flirtier
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Viv
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More facial expressions in tipperary.
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Lights
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Off Judith’s side when it is joan and
son
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Needs
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Sweaters
Wedding rings
Sweaters
jackets
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I’m going to use these critiques to better my character and I really need help with flirting on stage cause I have no clue how to do that and make it look natural so any suggestions would be nice.
ReplyDeleteI’ll continue to improve my character everyday! I feel like mine and Evans scene could flow a little bit better so if anyone’s has any ideas, let me know!
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ReplyDeleteI'm trying to be annoying and aggressive as the photographer. If anyone has any ideas of specific actions I could take or videos I could watch I would love to hear them! Now that I realize I don't have to be so quick about things, I can slow down and work hard on being in charge.
ReplyDeletelooking back at the lines will be better for them because it will help them read into it and try to understand what they are saying and why.
ReplyDeleteIt needs to flow better... y’all are acting like you know what is going to be said before they say it. I think that over all we have alrsady gotten so much better each rehearsal. We are ahead by a lot so let’s just keep improving!
ReplyDeleteWhen you are speaking have more diction and hit the verbs. When you are saying lines make them more of a suprise like you’ve never heard them before.
ReplyDeleteWe need to continue to work on transitions, slow motion, and freezes. Do everything if it were really happening in real time
ReplyDeleteAccents, volumes, big movements, emotions. In other words, work on making your characters look as real as possible. Build your characters up as a real human being. I think actors/actresses need to take these critiques and build onto the previous ones. Don’t forget everything else you’ve been told to do.
ReplyDeleteTransitions,lights,and music need a little bit of work but we can get it to help set the tone and mood on the play.
ReplyDeleteWe need to continue having people noises after the bombs explode and at the end Eli needs tmake sure he comes in on time with the soldier puppet. Make sure we can see the puppet during that part because it shows that all the soldier who fought lost a lot in the war.
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