April 5

Everyone	What happened to diction? Say names almost each time you speak. Calloused to Tipperary – it’s not spontaneous. Don’t look ahead of time where you are putting things. Sing scared and look terrified Re read earlier critiques. Tipperary people – put rubble more left stage so that Judith and Joan’s scene is not blocked by rubble. Project more Practice doesn’t make perfect.  Perfect practice makes perfect.  Thanks to Maky for notes. Don’t say extra sentences.  Words spontaneous work Beach scene – couldnot understand DICTION LOUDER Rehearsals need to be taken seriously Everyone is anticipating lines. REACT TO WAR BEING DECLARED. Need fog especially in Joan and Judith scene Judith’s dress must be in the rubble. Move right stage crates open
Angie	Put hand in hole and touch near Kate
Sheila & Bela Factory women	Last factory scene women would do anything to save yourselves.  Look at J & J almost accusing them or give them up to Frakker.  Joan’s always drunk so she could have done it.  Everyone knows Judith could be accused. Bigger laughs in first scene – Bela is the only one laughing First factory scene boring.  Look at each other - interact
Bar scene	Love Sheila talking, bela looking at ring and Joan drinking BUT look at Sheila once or twice.
Haris	Your words force your hands so you can look at them. You can’t believe that these hands that create can destroy
Judith	Jacket in scenes where everyone is wearing jackets.
Tom	Cough was fake in dead girl Shoes? Be fascinated with body More down stage with glass.
Eli	DICTION – each word in each line must be heard – base wage That bomb needs A fuse
Music	Too loud Tipperary Second bomb needs to be louder - Sarah
ALister	Ask Sarah – you cant go around like that
Mrs. Briggs	Could hear you first and diction great – later could not hear.
Mr. Briggs	Drop bat closer to left stage
Bela	Photographer – don’t walk in front of people talking – Mrs. Briggs
Sheila	See Reese – make it obvious and then love a man
Ramzi -worker	Screw the lid with difficulty off bomb
Watches	2