COMMENT ON THIS. Maky and Riley did most of the critiques. Mine were intermixed.

EVERYONE	Opening of play was slow You are anticipating the freezes and especially Tipperary Everyone freeze in motion. Freezes were sloppy at the end. LISTEN TO EACH OTHER – IT’S BECOMING EVIDENT Look around after first bomb scene – You have to make it clear it is the first time this has happened. KEEP watching the soldiers as they leave until SHHH GREAT COMMENT FROM MAKY – SAY EACH OTHERS’ NAMES – THAT WILL MAKE THE LINES FRESH. Rule Britannia was great today. In the first freeze everyone was facing the same way – ask Maky.  I noticed Frank and Judith DICTION   DICTION   DICTION Everyone needs to be louder – the stage will be bigger.
Judith	Tag on dress Thanks for moving suitcase down. Do you want Alee and Kate to do it? In Judith Joan scene – we believe – hit believe You say front twice in the last monologue – hit both differently. Lower pitch in doll scene.
Bela	Don’t anticipate Sheila singing.
Sound	Could not hear some of the gunfire at the beginning. Louder on air raid sirens when no one is talking in the beginning. Sound in dead person scene needs work – see Maky
War head and soldier puppet	Don’t move them too late.  They are the entrances to the scene.  Head listed to the left at the beginning.
Viv and Soldier 1	Viv, let us see the expression on your face as Sheila does the desert fox line  then shimmy – seems too orchestrated. Aussie – have a funny face – oh gosh- react more. Also, Aussie, a beat longer before you follow Viv.  They laughed last night but would laugh more if you milked it.
Soldier 2	Start and finish in accent
Judith and Frank	Freeze in motion Frank, your diction is good, but Judith’s is REALLY good.  Match hers. Last shirt line was weird – no vocals. It just stopped.
Frank	Look out – don’t turn upstage to Judith. – I don’t know what
Military men	Work on win the war
Joan	What’s our wages? Slower diction Amazing – don’t tell me to say good bye.  I agree with Maky.  You improve with each performance. Good job raising flask – that’s right love
Aussie 1 Brian	Down under – hit the n’s and d.  Let your voice crack as Aussie 1 More Aussie than English More heartbroken, not mad when speaking to your mom.
Sheila	Monologue more heartfelt.  Think about the words Change the way you say – we haven’t killed anyone – many of your lines are starting to sound the same.Maybe laugh – like she is ridiculous – you haven’t made any bombs.
Aussie 2 & Angie	Watch your scene being too memorized.
Joan	Hope you remember how you did little woman.  It was magnificent. You changed the way you said many of your lines – wonderfully fresh.
Frakker	Cost us the war – hit t   DICTION make each word different.
Briggs family	Good on getting up quickly after the bomb. Speak to Mrs. Kuehler about her view on the scenes.
Alister	COMMIT to UGGGH LOUDER, but you were better with everything else.
Mrs. Gently -	Say Mrs. Gently in your lines about Alister when the men have gone. Good noise falling Don’t anticipate drum
Tom	Louder Fall when the bomb hits.